In dire need of help easy 10 points. thanks a lot!?

can you please check the grammar for the following paragraph





I support the second explanation. The gods had set Gilgamesh’s destiny to kingship not to everlasting life. Gilgamesh finally realizes that death is real when his companion Enkidu dies. Even though Gilgamesh realizes that death is real, he still tries to cheat death. He continues on with his journey to the ends of the earth where he finds Utnapishtim. Utnapishtim tells Gilgamesh about a flower that restores youth. Gilgamesh goes to retrieve the flower but while bathing, a serpent snatches the flower from Gilgamesh. “ It rose out of the water and snatched it away, and immediately it sloughed its skin and returned to the well. Then Gilgamesh sat down and wept, the tears ran down his face, and he took the hand of Urshanabi; O Urshanabi, was it for this that I toiled with my hands, is it for this I have wrung out my heart’s blood? For myself I have gained nothing; not I, but the beast of the earth has joy of it now.” This incident proves that Gilgamesh is not destined to have eternal life. Gilgamesh was meant to fail in his pursuit of worldly immortality so that he could have a revelation: true immortality after death lies in creating a legacy in life. When he realized this, he worked to become the best king he could be, and thus was remembered in tales that survive to this day.

In dire need of help easy 10 points. thanks a lot!?
I've added a couple of commas and cut out quite a bit of your essay so that you can easily spot the few changes I've made--I definitely DON'T mean that you should actually cut anything. (I added the words "Gilgamesh is" to correct a dangling modifier--it originally looked as if the snake were bathing.)





. . . kingship, not to everlasting life. . . . . Even though Gilgamesh realizes that death is real, he NEVERTHELESS tries , , , . ends of the earth, where he finds Utnapishtim. . . . flower, but while GILGAMESH IS bathing, a serpent snatches the flower from HIM. [Everything is fine from here on.]
Reply:Sounds great. At the beginning of the quote there's an extra space
Reply:Looks fine to me, except that I'd probably say "the serpent snatches the flower from him."


Hope this helps.
Reply:you need to take out the space "mentioned my another user) and make sure that it is all in th esame tense, other than that, it sounds great





good luck
Reply:except the space which two others have mention it all looks fine