Which version of my poem is better?

just curious to see which one you guys like more


2 different and yet the same versions








1. here's the first:





Early, eager, excited snowflake


Released, free from your frosted fortress


A droplet of fresh, cool water frozen in time


No past, no future, one goal in mind


Sparkling,


Twirling,


Dancing down, down


To your goal, you doom


As greedy Green Earth greets you warmly





2. here's the second:





Early snowflake, released from the top





A droplet of fresh, cool water, frozen in time, with one goal on your mind





Sparkiling, twirling, dancing through the air





Down, down, closer





Graceful and Kind on your own





Icy and cruel with your kin, like a child caving into peer pressure





Reaching Green Earth





Only to sink deep into its skin, atmosphere, sky





And start all over again

Which version of my poem is better?
i think they both are really good~!!! but if i had to choose id choose number 2 its really good lol
Reply:i think the second one is more optimistic =)
Reply:Number 2 is better.Thanks for the poems.
Reply:you shad showe the fown first so ican answer ok cuty.
Reply:i like the first one much better.sounds good
Reply:i like both, but if i had to choose, i would go with number 2, only because...and yes this will sound stupid...if its snowing, the earth couldn't great u "warmly" xD yes i know its metaphoric